Pronoun Reference

Pronoun reference errors give a lot of beginning writers trouble. A pronoun reference error occurs when you use a pronoun like he or she, and it’s not clear what that pronoun refers to. Here is an example:

When Darth Vader and Luke Skywalker were battling with their light sabers, he became angry.

Who does he refer to? It isn’t clear. A pronoun should clearly refer to its antecedent (the word it replaces), so if the antecedent is not clear, you need to revise. Here’s an example of how you might correct the pronoun reference error:

When Darth Vader and Luke Skywalker were battling with their light sabers, Luke became angry.

What about this slight variation?

When Darth Vader had a light saber battle with Luke Skywalker, Darth Vader became angry.

This sentence isn’t grammatically incorrect, but it is a bit clunky. Because we’ve tweaked the opening half of the sentence so that Darth Vader is the subject (instead of Darth and Luke, like in the previous example), we can replace our second use of Darth Vader with a pronoun to tighten up the writing.

When Darth Vader had a light saber battle with Luke Skywalker, he became angry.

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